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    dots Submission Name: Christmas in July (from me, to you)dots

    Author: silentpoison
    ASL Info:    22/F/Teh Shire
    Elite Ratio:    2.67 - 204/259/118
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsChristmas in July (from me, to you)dots

    You set me down
    To slowly unwrap me
    Delicately unraveling
    Tearing me down to bare threads
    Treading lightly
    As to not to soil the intricacy
    to what you been given
    a gift
    the tag on the sleeve says
    To you
    From me
    The surprise is in my eyes
    And for you my dear
    A smile
    Worth a thousand words
    And a picture in your mind
    That will last a life time

    Submitted on 2008-08-06 15:09:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      What a delightful gift, in July, and at anytime! This was fun, mischevious, and very sensual! I liked it!
    | Posted on 2009-10-17 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Very sweet piece, and soooo very, very romantical!! loved it! bravo... bravo... bravo..
    | Posted on 2008-08-13 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]

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