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    dots Submission Name: butterfliesdots
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    Author: andnow
    ASL Info:    19.f.wa
    Elite Ratio:    3.57 - 136/135/42
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 666
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 441



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    dotsbutterfliesdots
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    have you ever let back your head
    and watched all the butterflies escape,
    perhaps a pretty bluebird here or there?

    and you never really liked butterflies incredibly more than the next person,
    but now that you realize they're a part of your being you accept it and think,
    "that's cool".

    and all of this only because you looked toward the sky and extended your arms.




    Submitted on 2008-08-06 19:24:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I know this isn't the expected response, but:

    This piece is badass.

    I like the simple, contemplative perspective you expose here for us to read.

    And the word choice is perfect.

    Punctuation punctual.

    Thanks.

    ~Keeg
    | Posted on 2008-08-08 00:00:00 | by Sheakhan | [ Reply to This ]
      yes i have learned to appreciate beauty. for i have been alone in my life for 5 years or so. although i normally feel grey on the inside, i do my best to let the color world sink into my mind.

    Great poem, i liked the first verse of it.
    | Posted on 2008-08-07 00:00:00 | by Bozly | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the ending of this poem, but I feel that the middle lets it down a bit. It seems like the "all of this" you refer to in the last part isn't as much of a climax as it could be. The main reason for this is, I think, the "that's cool" which doesn't seem like enough. However, the poems ideas are wonderful, and I love the thought of opening your hands to let loose streams of butterflies and birds.
    | Posted on 2008-08-06 00:00:00 | by Hecate | [ Reply to This ]


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