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    dots Submission Name: Numbdots
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    Author: sweetme16
    ASL Info:    21/f/who cares
    Elite Ratio:    2.21 - 108/252/162
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 707
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
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    I see you walking away
    breaking my heart into a million peaces

    With each step that you take
    I feel a ache start deep inside my soul

    Feel it seeping into each and every part of me
    I feel the cold start at my feet

    And work its way up
    Till it fills every part of me

    Finally I start to feel numb
    More and more
    Until I canít feel anything at all ever again




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