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    dots Submission Name: Bad Man Bluesdots

    Author: my shadow
    Elite Ratio:    4.82 - 291/150/48
    Words: 243
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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       Just a blues song

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    dotsBad Man Bluesdots

    Woke up this morning,
    blues all 'round my bed.
    Went to breakfast,
    found the blues in my bread.
    My woman say, "You go find a job,"
    But people, I got to tell you,
    I don't do anything but steal and rob.

    Went down to the corner store,
    took the money and run out the door.
    Policeman come by my house,
    He say, "Where is that louse?"
    My woman say she don't know,
    but when he sees me,
    "Tell me not to come home anymore."

    Went to stay by my friend,
    He wasn't home, but his wife say, "Come on in."
    We got to drinking wine, feeling mighty fine
    My friend came home, found me in his bed.
    Went for his gun to shoot me dead,
    I cut him with my knife,
    He bled away his life.

    Now I cannot get out of this jail,
    Judge won't set me bail.
    Preacher man come by and say,
    "Is there anything I can do for you today?"
    I say, "Have you got a cure,
    Have you got a cure,
    For the blues?"

    Now people you have heard my story told,
    It's the same as man is old.
    Go teach your sons not to steal and rob,
    Teach them not to take another man's wife.
    And, oh, lord .. lord .. lord,
    Teach them never, never, never,
    Never take another man's life.

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      I agree that this is very original, and captivating.

    It is honest, and I think that is my favorite part about it. It says throughout, yes this is my truth, and then natural consequences follow.

    I like how your writing is so out with it, there is no drama, no added emphasis on anything, but the subject matter chosen is often dramatic. I think that contradiction between subject and presentation makes for a really great and original work.

    thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2011-08-04 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      This is absolutely mastered creative wise.Was there any inspiration for this or did it just come about bc this is something men could read in prison.This is awesome piece.i picture a guy from the south.Biloxi,Savannah, French Quarter maybe.He's out on his luck is what came to mind when it started of.I'm glad to be commenting bc ppl can teach each other that we can make up for the wrong we do to ppl but we can never make up for a lost life so I take this very serious bc also it's gives a message about friendship and the respect that must be established upon.So big ups to you for this great write.The title is on point and you delivered.FAV.What makes it even more cooler is that these are lyrics.Do you sing or just have a love for writing lyrics? if you dont mind me asking.
    | Posted on 2010-08-21 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]
      Brilliant! This almost leaps from the page and croons through you.
    The opening stanza is well written and draws you in. I specially liked the "found the blues in my bread" line. It adds a tiny amount of humor to it.
    | Posted on 2009-09-03 00:00:00 | by fictionalfiend | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this original piece.
    Can't understand why no one else is commenting.
    Your style is graceful, humor apparent, and message clear. The last stanza is my favorite.
    | Posted on 2008-08-07 00:00:00 | by LovelyGoddess | [ Reply to This ]

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