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    dots Submission Name: I Wish I Was Kimya Dawsondots
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    Author: EEKS
    Elite Ratio:    2.84 - 647/1072/602
    Words: 258
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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    dotsI Wish I Was Kimya Dawsondots
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    I decided to ignore your phone calls
    I miss my best friend, you didn't know him at all
    You're in the bathroom checking your reflection
    and I am hiding, afraid of perfection

    You're tossing apples
    and I'm escaping cannibals
    You don't like my songs and stories
    and that is as bad just hating me

    Johnny couldn't read because he liked to sing
    and I can't learn math because I like to read
    If you give me directions I still won't find you
    and if I lost you, I really wouldn't mind it

    I took a bike ride but I couldn't make it up the hill
    and you said thats ok because you didn't either
    You had a new girlfriend, I think it was Lacey
    I am kind of sad you want to leave her

    You are tossing apples
    Now I am chasing cannonball
    Your mom never liked me
    We are always fighting

    When we talk I feel like you're looking at my collarbone
    I know I am put together wrong and I stick out at odd angles
    My spine is crooked and my shoulders feel broken
    Our conversation just get strange and stranger

    I wish I knew ballet, I'd like to be a dancer somehow
    I would've voted for Nader, he seemed like a party
    But I'm not old enough to do much of anything now
    I don't check the time and I don't remember me

    Come to think of it I never knew you









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      Johnny couldn't read because he liked to sing
    and I can't learn math because I like to read


    I like these lines

    It does sound a little like Kimya Dawson. The way everything's laid out like there is no easy way to say it all, so just start talking and hope you cover it...

    (6th line up needs something pluraled, either 'conversation[s]' or 'get[s]')
    | Posted on 2008-08-23 00:00:00 | by etheror | [ Reply to This ]
      so I had no clue who Kimya Dawson was... I did google, then you tube (if that helps).

    what I really like about this is it is a stream of lotsa stuff all intertwined into something that means. ya know? maybe not. it has a rambling effect, (kinda like this song I am listening to at the moment), but it kept my interest, so I figured I'd tell ya.
    | Posted on 2008-08-18 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]


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