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    dots Submission Name: Corner Stack Jack: He Was Born to Be Blackdots
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    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    18/M/Ohio State
    Elite Ratio:    6.06 - 174/189/127
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsCorner Stack Jack: He Was Born to Be Blackdots
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    I wish I could spin this thread to read a different direction,
    Clothing meant to be discarded rather than layered on.
    That kind of backwards thinking where happiness is always
    Just around the corner by the convenience store
    In a bottle labeled with trouble and an X,
    To the mark the spot you sold yourself too short.
    Dealing with thugs waiting for the big payoff,
    That you should’ve knew was too good to be true.
    Curious cats poking their heads in and out
    Of the makings and breakings of the underground.
    Death too quick, in soundless silence.




    Submitted on 2008-08-07 00:37:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really liked this.... I kept thinking, another line... like, another line needed... why am I thinking that? I feel like I'm standing at the edge of a fall at the end...

    I love the title.... it's slick-trick shiny and grabbishly silver. You want to reach out and touch the metal of it with a finger.... spin it around on the table. Nice revolutions in the lines, but... I want one more line :)

    | Posted on 2009-11-08 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]
      I know all to well the life you are describing
    I Lived in California Venice Beach to be exact and I saw so many young lives ruined by ganglife and drugs
    It really is quite sad
    I Pray for these children every day of my life hoping they will wake up and realize that that is not a life
    The True Life is The Positive Life and I dont care what religion a person is a Person can accomplish anything with God guiding them and Living strong in their Heart
    Great Work!!!
    Looking forward to reading more from you in the Future!!
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2008-08-07 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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