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    dots Submission Name: Got Milf?dots
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    Author: rws
    ASL Info:    57/m/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 2777/1297/258
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
    Total Views: 624
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    Bytes: 799



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       ~take me to the river~


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    dotsGot Milf?dots
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    Got Milf?

    I wouldnít mind a sweet sobriquet
    Seductionís easy-isnít it my pet?
    A little lip between bon and mot
    Synapses dancing to a twist in the plot

    The air is glowing like a sleek cigarette
    White hot and whispery words pirouette
    And Iím left dangling from your proffered hand
    A wish away from promise and land

    Riding the rim of night as it falls
    I may be the biggest fool of them all
    Regret met love and neither would flinch
    I havenít seen either of them since

    Iíve shared some blues and a loverís lament
    The lies were white with a lavender scent
    Time to caress what passes for dawn
    Before sheís bought her ticket and gone

    Ö.gone




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      yup.... added to my favorites.....
    | Posted on 2008-10-07 00:00:00 | by col13x | [ Reply to This ]
      milfs make the world go round, didn't ya know? where did yours hail from and where was she going in such a hurry?

    classically metered, but with a modern, ironic twist.
    booyaa.
    | Posted on 2008-08-09 00:00:00 | by discombobulated | [ Reply to This ]
      my favourite line iwould be

    white hot and whispery words pirouettte

    i like the way you play with your words here:

    like a little lip between bon and mot; very french :)

    overall, this is full of self-irony; and the tinsiest bit wistful.
    | Posted on 2008-08-08 00:00:00 | by expiring_touch | [ Reply to This ]
      Very Interesting write
    I havent read any works from you in a while and thios write just refreshed my mind to what I have been missing
    I thought this was very clever and the rhyme scheme was very well done
    I also liked how your words brought the reader right into the situation as if you were riting about them
    Great Job!!!
    Looking forward to reading more from you soon
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2008-08-07 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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