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    dots Submission Name: a poem that spoke our namesdots

    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 324
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsa poem that spoke our namesdots

    you say,
    "do not touch me,
    i am flawed."
    but does that mean
    that no one
    should be touched?
    for we all
    seem to be
    so inherently
    by the same

    as if
    i would really
    crush you
    were you to
    come to me.
    as if
    the transparency
    of knowing
    was not to know.
    at least
    down to a deeper
    where the gnosis

    you say,
    "i will come
    & get you."
    as if
    you would
    take me into
    your pavement
    where it's warm.
    & i would raise
    these wings
    for you to gather
    there beneath.

    then you say,
    "i don't know
    what to say,"
    which is the truth.
    & i find
    no falsehood
    in this thought.
    if i were to say
    that i could fall
    into you,
    you would merely reply,
    "take care of yourself."

    if you were standing
    on a map
    of where you are,
    you would
    look northward
    & perhaps briefly
    towards the east.
    then you would look
    back up again.

    & i wonder
    if you can trust yourself
    to recognize
    your own detours.
    or if,
    along the way
    they've been replaced
    with guideposts
    that lead you
    towards your doom.

    i don't wish
    to change you.
    let me reinvent
    that you know
    starting with
    your first breath
    which was a poem
    that spoke our names
    into the airy
    yeasts of night
    that rose to greet us.

    i want
    to make games
    of the sky
    & of the seasons
    & the stars
    & the music
    & the moon.
    that is turning
    & just barely turning
    is a reminder
    to never let
    the past
    prevent us
    from our fates.

    i can not sleep,
    you see,
    for i wish
    to know *heaven
    from the inside
    while i'm still alive.

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