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    dots Submission Name: From Angel, to Burdendots
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    Author: MinervaBlu
    ASL Info:    17 nowhere
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 240/230/178
    Words: 148
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 41
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    dotsFrom Angel, to Burdendots
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    I have become such a burden
    To that one that I love
    He doesn't think so
    To him, I'm from above

    I have gone from girlfriend
    The wedge in his family
    I love him so much
    But this won't end happily

    I yearn to be his angel
    To be what he wants me to be
    But I am to cursed to fallen
    To be anything but me

    I once believed I was earthbound
    Sent from Heaven to be with him
    But my mind was playing tricks
    Laughing at the joke so grim

    I've caused trouble long enough
    To my one and only, I say goodbye
    Neither want this to happen
    And we will both cry

    It has to be done. It's for the best
    I am only his highschool sweetheart
    Not worth the fight with his father
    Today we love birds must part.




    Submitted on 2008-08-07 14:30:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Aww, thats really sweet and very sad.
    Im sorry for the pain you are both going through. Its a hard a rough decision to make and decided whats the best.
    The poem is really creative. I love the analogy of being the angel/burden.
    Very great write.
    | Posted on 2008-08-08 00:00:00 | by dreamer37517 | [ Reply to This ]


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