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    dots Submission Name: Mistakendots
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    Author: Brianna_rose
    ASL Info:    14
    Elite Ratio:    3.49 - 11/13/11
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 56
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 469



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    The girl who's heart was cold and bitter.
    Her face so pale, that she looked ghostly.
    Walking in the wrong direction, every way she goes.
    Wondering, does anybody know?
    How mad she is inside, nobody knows that she crys.

    Blood dripping down her wrist, making puddles as she cries herself to sleep for the last time.
    Leaving secrets, memories, and all the pain she felt inside.
    This is her last goodbye.




    Submitted on 2008-08-07 20:14:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This was written very well. Not very detailed and the emotion is lacking because of that. I'm sure many girls can relate to this. We've all been there at some point in time.
    I really do hope this is just a very good poem.
    Suicide is a permanant solution to a temporary problem.

    Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading

    »Haely«
    | Posted on 2008-08-07 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]


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