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    dots Submission Name: The Nature of Thingsdots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Nature of Thingsdots
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    Lifted autumn leaves
    Through the cold clear air.
    Warm comfort colors
    Hold the branches bare.

    Blankets of dead,
    Renewing nature's gift.
    Myrtle's beautious origami,
    A notion of self-lift.

    Exceeding beyond any pine,
    Discord met with mirth.
    Repine defaced, unison and fond,
    Transmute heath to nature's re-birth.

    So, let the snow fall
    Inundate flakes frozen fiend.
    Let the pure things starve,
    For soon it will be spring.




    Submitted on 2008-08-07 20:36:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      What a piece. The changing of seasons a popular subject for writers and yet yours is quite different than anything I've read.

    Very descriptive, which I happen to favor, but your description focuses beyond the death of fall but keeps a gentle reminder that death is equal to rebirth, for you must have one for the other.

    Blankets of dead,
    Renewing nature's gift.
    Myrtle's beautious origami,
    A notion of self-lift.


    My favorite of your lines. Although I also enjoyed your play on words in the third stanza.

    I wish I had a scrape of criticism, yet I truly enjoyed the piece and don't wish the see it changed. Thank you for the read!




    | Posted on 2008-08-08 00:00:00 | by AlmostEloquent | [ Reply to This ]


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