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    dots Submission Name: Rebel Spiritdots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Old write i found, figure i'll share with you


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    dotsRebel Spiritdots
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    A soul fights for breath
    Gasping and grabbing to the edge.
    Existence might fade
    It needs to break the surface.

    Coming too close to death
    A flightless little fledge.
    Scythe's blade evades
    The spirit of the worthless.

    But this soul is a prize
    To be hung and admired.
    A bove a golden mantle
    It lights its own fire.

    It's creativity flowing
    attached to a little cyst.
    It belongs to the poet
    By the name of Chris.

    So, my soul rebels
    It's no longer obsessed with flesh.
    My body's a aleatory
    Holding my soul above the mantle
    Where it rests.




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