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    dots Submission Name: T'was All A Dreamdots
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    Author: realpoet
    Elite Ratio:    6.54 - 800/427/261
    Words: 232
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Description:
       Country people have country dreams.
    Some are frightening, especially, to a country boy.


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    dotsT'was All A Dreamdots
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    While jumping on a wagon when as a boy,
    There was a mule kicking up its heels in joy.
    It thought it was going places it hadn't been
    Then comes along some chicks with mother hen.
    The mule got nervous and let out a neigh
    No way was it going with the chicks in the way.
    The chicks were shooed then mother hen jumped on me,
    "Look -a-here,boy, let my chicks be!"

    The mule didn't like mother hen's fluttering wings.
    It took off down the road with wagon full of things.
    They were bounced and jostled off into a ditch.
    T'was then I wondered would dad come with a switch.
    Suddenly the reins got caught in a wheel
    And boy was I glad for the wagon to be still.
    But that old mule kicked the single-tree
    And the chains came loose ,the mule ran free.
    Running down the road I screamed after the mule
    shaking my fist, I said,"Mule we'er gonnah have a duel!"

    Lucky for me, it was then I awoke.
    T'was all a dream ending with happy betoke,
    Now I wouldn't get a switching for shooing the chicks
    And wouldn't be laughed at by other country hicks.
    But I was prepared to pad my pants
    When that switch across my butt would dance.











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      what a nice read! I felt sorry for the poor boy who had this terrible dream - but I enjoyed it so much!
    Im struggling a bit to catch the rhythm of this poem -especially with line 11 - feels a bit out of rhythm with the rest of the poem.
    Overall enjoyed!
    | Posted on 2008-08-08 00:00:00 | by lily21 | [ Reply to This ]


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