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    dots Submission Name: The World as apposed to myself.dots
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    Author: BestxDeceptions
    ASL Info:    22, Female, Kentucky.
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 25/66/49
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe World as apposed to myself.dots
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    When you walk among
    the deadened souls with
    seeping blurry eyes,
    it's not quite natural.

    Sometimes all that
    I need is just one person
    to believe in me,
    or maybe just to believe.

    I am greatness,
    and I'm sure that
    I seem like I'm most
    certain.

    Sometimes it's hard to
    feel like that when you,
    are constantly torn
    down.

    It takes a strong person
    to be alone
    and to be happy
    that way.

    I don't think that
    I'm quite that
    strong
    right now.

    I need someone to
    want to see me
    when they wake up
    and when they sleep.

    I want one person to
    maybe need me almost as
    much as I need
    them.

    The world is cruel and
    heartless.
    I imagine that it has
    caused this.




    Submitted on 2008-08-08 03:53:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It's strange but after awhile you can get used to just about anything. Even being alone. At least when you are alone no one can hurt you. You just gotta love yourself the way you want to be loved, because the few that can love the way you describe are probably all taken if not extinct. On the last line you put image instead of imagine.
    | Posted on 2008-08-08 00:00:00 | by ArchusMuta | [ Reply to This ]


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