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    dots Submission Name: Sometimesdots
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    Author: BestxDeceptions
    ASL Info:    22, Female, Kentucky.
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 25/66/49
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsSometimesdots
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    Sometimes when I
    close my eyes I feel like
    maybe if I just lay here,
    It will go away.

    But, when I open them
    not only does it not go
    away, but, It's worse
    than when I started.

    Could you tell me
    which road leads
    to nowhere?

    Maybe if I turn left
    I'll be on the right
    path.
    Or maybe you're just stupid.

    When I dream at night
    as soon as I wake I
    forget what it was that I
    saw there.

    Maybe I just,
    don't dream at all.

    Maybe I just,
    shouldn't close my eyes,
    at all.

    Maybe if lay here long
    enough, something would happen
    and I would remember
    everything.





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      Try cellary....lol i heard it's good for insomniacs..yeah it works as a natural sedative...or better yet try weed, things make a lot more sense
    | Posted on 2008-08-08 00:00:00 | by SavedDragon | [ Reply to This ]
      What was the "maybe you're just stupid"? Is that a sense of humor? lol. That stanza makes me think of how I personally seem to make so many bad decisions. Perhaps if I could change my polarity and do the opposite I might make some good decisions. I wonder what you mean when you say you want to go to the road that leads to nowhere. Trying to figure this one out. I read it three times already....but whatever is messing with your sleep needs to settle down. :D
    | Posted on 2008-08-08 00:00:00 | by ArchusMuta | [ Reply to This ]


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