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    dots Submission Name: Stranger Seduction. dots
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    Author: BestxDeceptions
    ASL Info:    22, Female, Kentucky.
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 25/66/49
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       Hah. I was in the mood for love. hah. To say the least.

    Grocery stores, are awesome. =P


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    dotsStranger Seduction. dots
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    Today I met a man
    in a dark, tailored suit.
    He looked much like,
    he was from out of town.

    He smiled at me,
    and I smiled back.
    I handed him his change,
    and he winked.

    As he walked away
    I seen the way his
    body moved.

    I wonder what
    he would look like
    if I took off, the tie.
    If I slipped off his jacket.

    If I unbuttoned his pants
    and decided the shirt
    was next to go.
    It lays nicely on my floor.

    So, maybe if I hadn't
    miscounted his change,
    I would yell after him.

    I am quite curious
    as to what his
    pants would look like
    on my bed post.




    Submitted on 2008-08-08 03:55:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Excellent write, Celessia! We all fantascize about others we see in public, and it's delightful to see an honest expression of it from someone else! You have a developing talent for writing that most encouraging!
    | Posted on 2008-08-08 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      lol....i laughed out loud when you said that you would have called him if you hadn't miscounted his change. So you were really lusting over this man and really wondering what he might look like underneath the suit. You mos def let us in your mind there. Fantastic!
    | Posted on 2008-08-08 00:00:00 | by SavedDragon | [ Reply to This ]
      the wonder for lust is always a strange emotion. Never stop wondering about the mysterious men in your life.
    | Posted on 2008-08-08 00:00:00 | by silentpoison | [ Reply to This ]
      Wonder what that guy would say if he read your poem. lol.
    | Posted on 2008-08-08 00:00:00 | by ArchusMuta | [ Reply to This ]


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