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    dots Submission Name: When I dream, If I sleepdots
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    Author: nasuka
    ASL Info:    22/m/WA
    Elite Ratio:    2.93 - 124/186/48
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 800
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    Bytes: 850



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       The first thing I have written in a LONG time.


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    dotsWhen I dream, If I sleepdots
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    Grab my hand and we'll fly to a wonderous place.
    Full of darkness, full of pain, but joy, theres no trace.
    Faces they smile, eyes beating red.
    Laughing and giggling they whisper, "Rollover, play dead."
    Rivers run quick, glistning red streams,
    stone built walls that carry shrill screams.
    It feels like home, so cozy and cold,
    welcome to death, at last behold.
    Theres knives in the corner, pills in the back. Also hemp rope, to tie up body sacks.
    Dont mind the demons, they dont tend to bite.
    They only cause trouble, howling in the night. Come and relax, sit in this chair.
    Be not a afriad, no need to care.
    You'll be ok, all will be well.
    As long as you like fire, Congratulations, you've made it to hell.





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      wow, simply outstanding, amazing, tantalizing...i'm lost for words...how the hell did you come up with this piece.
    I love it and adding it to my favorites. Thanks alot for this it was really refreshing.

    Kudos,
    BVG
    | Posted on 2008-08-23 00:00:00 | by b_v_grant | [ Reply to This ]
      i'm really impressed.
    really.
    you just made every person's hopes and dreams,
    into a living nightmare.
    congratulations,
    you did an amazing job on capturing your image and muse.
    like, i'm really astounded.
    i've had an idea in my head for a while now to get it down,
    but now i don't want to even try.
    you didn't need to get all graphic and dramatic, either.
    you just sat it down and said, "hey, this is what it's like. there's nothing fancy about it."
    I'm looking forward to more of your stuff.
    Peace<3

    <bleedingtears>
    | Posted on 2008-08-10 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]


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