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    Author: vampirefreak69
    Elite Ratio:    2.19 - 30/99/82
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    It’s entertaining to watch stray bubbles escape my chapped lips
    as I sink deeper and deeper; the pockets of life grow smaller and smaller.

    I took a hatchet to my brain cells yesterday.
    (Impulse)
    it lay silent on the floor and I wanted to help it.
    (Comfort)
    so I grasped the wrapped handle and held up the blade.
    (Strange)
    then I met the soft steel face to face.
    (Hello)

    In this cracked-glass torture chamber even gas-masks
    can’t save me from the poison in the air.




    Submitted on 2008-08-09 08:27:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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