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    dots Submission Name: Flowers for Youdots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 23/161/138
    Words: 239
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsFlowers for Youdots
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    Decided to pick up gardening
    What I planted was a weed
    Not a weed to me, though
    And so I buried the seed

    It grew and was ugly
    With beauty under the right light
    No one else saw what it could be
    No one cared what else it might

    It grew more every day
    It soon got out of control
    And so I quit taking care of it
    And I dug another hole

    I found a rose seed
    I planted beside the first
    I began caring for it
    It bloomed, I quenched it's thirst

    But when I looked about
    I noticed the weed start to wilt
    Neglected for some time
    Now it's stem has begun to tilt

    And so I watered it plenty
    I struggled to keep it alive
    No one would understand
    The origin of my drive

    However despite my efforts
    I couldn't seem balance the plant
    Destined to wilt or overgrow
    "Dig it up," my voices soon would chant

    And amidst my concerns
    A sickly rose kept its smile
    I realized I couldn't have both
    No, not even for a while

    And so I took up a spade
    Used it on a familiar task
    On the place it knew first
    Hopefully this time the last

    The rose has more beauty
    A rose tends to be more tame
    Always know to always care
    Weeds and roses wilt the same




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