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    dots Submission Name: Painlessdots
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    Author: aliceblack
    Elite Ratio:    0.35 - 0/2/3
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 118
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    Description:
       Yes, it's very emo, and yes, a lot of it is true.


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    dotsPainlessdots
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    I close my eyes,
    hoping everything will go away,
    under my breath I whisper,
    "Maybe my life will end today."

    All around me I hear screams,
    they grow louder and higher,
    until I can't take it anymore,
    I set myself on fire.

    I've always felt pain,
    until one day I became numb,
    when I saw the blood run down,
    I couldn't tell weather I was alive,
    or dead.




    Submitted on 2008-08-09 18:03:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Good rhyme, good form, very simplistic. It didnt create too unique of a theme, very dark, depressing. Shows a bit of youth, but theres enough maturity in this to prove you have a strong poetic foundation. As your life continues, and you grow as a person, I will enjoy watching as your poetry changes and evolves with time.
    | Posted on 2008-08-09 00:00:00 | by Passionbyapathy | [ Reply to This ]



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