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Author: Jazzy
ASL Info:    20/f/USA
Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 90 /221 /227
Words: 88
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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idk wrote it at youth group


Leave Me


Leave me to fend for myself,
Where alone becomes sorrow
Which becomes suicidal paradise.
How can you allow this for me?
Uncertainty plagues my entire life,
Some day in tomorrow we
Will be fullfilled.
I was turned so far around
I couldn't tell tomorrow from
Yesterday, from now.

I can be a good person
I can go through the motions
Let the lies decided for you
Until the truth somehow takes hold.
Someway this happen
Don't think that
You can pretend
You can survive.




Submitted on 2008-08-09 21:45:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Love this poem, it is very good.
Considering sending it to my website at
jaelatthedisco.synthasite.com
| Posted on 2008-08-10 00:00:00 | by Jazzy | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow that is just the greatest poem that I have read so far today and that says a lot because I've been looking at these poems on here for about 6 or 7 hours and I haven't found any as good as yours. I was wondering if you could look at my poem How could you. If you do I would like your opinion on it.

http://www.eliteskills.com/z/164503

Your poem left me wondering a few things though and here they are:
1. What inspired you to write this poem?
2. Who left you in this poem?
3. Why did they leave you?

In no way does it need improving. It made me feel as if you were going through the same thing as me.
| Posted on 2008-08-10 00:00:00 | by Rachel Ruff | [ Reply to This ]


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