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    dots Submission Name: Leave Medots
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    Author: Jazzy
    ASL Info:    14/f/USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.78 - 84/139/145
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 46
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    Bytes: 604



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       idk wrote it at youth group


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    dotsLeave Medots
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    Leave me to fend for myself,
    Where alone becomes sorrow
    Which becomes suicidal paradise.
    How can you allow this for me?
    Uncertainty plagues my entire life,
    Some day in tomorrow we
    Will be fullfilled.
    I was turned so far around
    I couldn't tell tomorrow from
    Yesterday, from now.

    I can be a good person
    I can go through the motions
    Let the lies decided for you
    Until the truth somehow takes hold.
    Someway this happen
    Don't think that
    You can pretend
    You can survive.




    Submitted on 2008-08-09 21:45:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Love this poem, it is very good.
    Considering sending it to my website at
    jaelatthedisco.synthasite.com
    | Posted on 2008-08-10 00:00:00 | by Jazzy | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow that is just the greatest poem that I have read so far today and that says a lot because I've been looking at these poems on here for about 6 or 7 hours and I haven't found any as good as yours. I was wondering if you could look at my poem How could you. If you do I would like your opinion on it.

    http://www.eliteskills.com/z/164503

    Your poem left me wondering a few things though and here they are:
    1. What inspired you to write this poem?
    2. Who left you in this poem?
    3. Why did they leave you?

    In no way does it need improving. It made me feel as if you were going through the same thing as me.
    | Posted on 2008-08-10 00:00:00 | by Rachel Ruff | [ Reply to This ]


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