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    Author: isaiahc4
    ASL Info:    26/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.28 - 120/196/60
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    i have a dream
    reoccuring every day
    I dream I'm captive
    half a world away.

    each morning I wake
    this dream is reality.
    Held here in place
    working for slaves salary

    I drempt I'm unappreciated
    thrown away like an empty can
    in this nightmare no one sees me
    nor can recognize who I am

    I bleed green now
    I wear it night and day.
    I dream of better places
    but here is where I have to stay.

    I drempt I lost all I loved
    each night that I sleep
    I dream still of losing
    all the things I've fought to keep

    this dream is my reality
    trapped with in the ROK.
    soldiering my year away
    till I'm freed from this new lock!!




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      i also feel the same pain u speak of cause i myself am a world away from the one i love i pray that each day that goes by it will get better n i can press on with something to look forward to that the only one who can hear me doesnt but keep your head up things will get better know matter what you r somebody even if u feel so small and that their is someone who loves you and thanks you for what you have done for them but all we can do is press on n take it a day at a time. plus there are two beatiful babys waiting to see their daddy and a wife waiting to see her man so that is one thing that isnt happening you losing them to my dearest husband Michael
    Love always sabrina
    | Posted on 2008-08-18 00:00:00 | by isaiahc4 | [ Reply to This ]


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