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    dots Submission Name: Unmerciful dots

    Author: BestxDeceptions
    ASL Info:    22, Female, Kentucky.
    Elite Ratio:    2.22 - 25/66/50
    Words: 184
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsUnmerciful dots

    The script reads so well through my mind.
    Each sentence and fragment waves emotion.
    When it comes to where I should say something,
    the script ends. My mind goes blank.

    You seem almost inhuman to me.
    How someone could tease like that.
    You wash your hands from the hurt that you've caused.
    I can't do that, now or ever.

    I could tell you several things that
    have made me want to hurt you.
    I suppose if I had known how,
    I would have tried.

    Payback is unmerciful.

    Each door you slammed in my face
    I pried open. Each shard you tore apart,
    I stitched. I took one breath before you
    came back for more.

    Stop blaming me.

    I wasn't the one that caused you
    so much pain. I eased it.
    I didn't force you to feel anything;
    You chose that.

    I won't be your warm body.
    I will not comfort you and then
    let you hurt me.

    I've come too far to give up now.

    When your lonely, don't call me.
    I won't be home.

    Submitted on 2008-08-10 05:25:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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