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    dots Submission Name: Hesitationdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    19/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 1183/1123/289
    Words: 50
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 66
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 420



    Description:
       This was kinda like the old stuff I use to write. But I kinda just decided that I am okay with it being a little impulsive. It might get revised, that is, I think I could elaborate on it.


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    dotsHesitationdots
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    Desire
    Love?
    Attraction
    Infatuation?
    Stimulation
    Elemental

    The Ocean meets and organic breath of
    and apple a day
    really does keep you healthy

    The environment suggests
    a gift
    in more ways than one
    with warmer soup today?
    just honesty
    I behold you
    with appreciation
    for tonight





    Submitted on 2008-08-10 07:17:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      yeah, i agree with what you said in the description.
    it does have potential, so why not try to elaborate?
    =]
    | Posted on 2008-08-10 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]


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