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    dots Submission Name: following hopeful beginningsdots

    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 195
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsfollowing hopeful beginningsdots

    often it seems
    that my heart tastes
    like whatever
    disires it most.
    until the flavor is gone
    & i remember
    that it will never
    be the same.
    following hopeful beginnings,
    it's as if the pigment
    is permanently removed
    from the precious spice.

    i look into
    my own eyes
    when i'm dreaming
    to get a sense
    of making sense
    of certain things.
    like why one must
    pursue into the hapless depths,
    the technologies
    that become
    their own undoing.

    we fall into these patterns
    as if the painting has changed
    & the outcome
    will produce
    some other scenario
    upon the body-canvas magik.
    as if we were
    genius in the face
    of past mistakings.

    i rub the images
    around in my head
    until they're scratching
    like milkless kittens
    towards my skull
    through brain.
    the nonsense
    of re-creation
    is in the act
    of repetition.

    the nonsense
    of re-creation
    is in the act
    of repetition,
    if i were to remove
    from all my futures,
    i feel as if
    i'd be standing
    on firmer sand...
    still waiting
    for the ocean to take me
    towards my ever absent home..

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      wow....this is really good...
    i'm at a loss for words...this is going on my favs. list...!
    great job..
    | Posted on 2008-08-11 00:00:00 | by never_far_away | [ Reply to This ]

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