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    dots Submission Name: The Birddots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 226
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
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    dotsThe Birddots

    In this little box of favors
    Dawn and moon are aquanted with three pillars
    Being the only allusions left
    made of stone and everlasting, this temple clings to the world

    The cities all go up around her
    The trees never falter to stand their ground

    and for reasons I can't explain
    painting the porch
    is natural to me

    Take the form of nudity
    and allow it to manifest it's true form

    A soldier with no shield

    The wind moves swiftly though the seasons
    The ocean turns over in his sleep
    The world turns and floats around in space

    Breath on the back of your neck in spring
    A gentle wave of brilliant blue affection
    An idol held high on the nape of the universe

    I see wars and corporations setting fire to
    the copy of politics
    only a reflection of desires, integridy, greed

    the root of evil is a square plus b square equals c square

    all men are created equal under God

    The wound doesn't exist without the wounded
    slaves are no better or worse than their man

    What a ridiculous picture we paint
    a tiny civilization on the tip of a needle
    the head spins
    silly people looking in the mirror

    Submitted on 2008-08-10 20:52:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ego + power is always going to end up a horrible equation; just to note the news of yet another dictator trying their hardest to hold onto their autocratic crown is evidence enough of this propensity to control every facet of one's life: these slaves who'll never know what freedom means, i as a slave as well to material goals, forgetting that everything is liquid, ever-changing and divorced from the inner reality i try to bring forth each day: this search for harmony and the simple, ecstatic vibration of beauty in all its forms.

    there is anger to this, but meditative and pure in its overall outcome.
    | Posted on 2008-09-06 00:00:00 | by discombobulated | [ Reply to This ]

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