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    dots Submission Name: Freshman Childdots

    Author: Childe-Wrote
    Elite Ratio:    1.78 - 17/53/44
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
    Total Views: 1064
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsFreshman Childdots

    There was this freshman
    She was quiet and shy, very reserved
    Stood out from all the crowds, very beautiful
    Sits alone in the cafetaria, watches the sophomore guy

    But the sophomore guy
    While he has no clue she exists
    Has those baby blues on the cheerleader
    So he sits with his buddies, has his eyes on the junior

    The junior girl in her red mercedes
    Her hair in pigtails and wearing all pink
    Doesn't notice the sophomore guy as she watches
    The senior guy; who has her attention yet he could care less

    The senior guy, all hot and wild...
    Doesn't notice any but the freshman child
    All shy and reserved; to him, she's all he desires
    So all year long, he has his eyes on the freshman child

    Submitted on 2008-08-11 00:17:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      omg this is so sweet...i love it!!! sorry, i know that I'm supposed to write something on how to make it better but really it's perfect the way it is.
    | Posted on 2009-11-10 00:00:00 | by bloddyrazorgirl | [ Reply to This ]

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