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    dots Submission Name: Decisiondots
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    Author: LucyDiamond
    ASL Info:    17/F/Sky
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 365/561/240
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 58
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 727



    Description:
       written at the lake.


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    dotsDecisiondots
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    Gnashing teeth
    condensed into a molecule

    —a seed planted in my brain.

    Laughter for a moment
    is gun powder

    —it typically leads to pain.

    A see-saw on rocks
    lifts legs that never tire

    —drain its blood.

    The two-sided stone
    that beats in my chest

    —plunged into the flood.

    Tip the topsy-turvy
    boat that never stops

    —swaying side to side.

    Confront the ghost
    of Hope who stayed

    —that constant, returning lie.

    Tie me up, bound with life

    —I’ll be going out
    with the tide.





    Submitted on 2008-08-11 04:00:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nice little poem, you wrote here. But I think you need to work on the structure. It tends to be too chaotic, which make it hard to read. But keep up the good work ;0)
    | Posted on 2008-08-12 00:00:00 | by KNS | [ Reply to This ]



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