Especially the part:
"The earth moves
The sky tears"
That was awesome, though you used the other form of the word tears immediately after, which lessened the effect.
I like the juxtaposition set up with the word "Yet..."
I like the concept, depressed as it is.
I would love to see more of people's reactions -- the infant not crying any more was a good one. But what about the middle-aged people? The elderly? The children? What about the nonreligious people vs. the religious people, or the happy people vs. the suicidal?
I'm torn about the ending. While I do like how simplistic it is, I also sort of want to know what's left. An empty broken world? A vast expanse of dust? Nothing at all?
I love the part about the clouds falling, though it would have been nice to get more of a sense of what that was like.
Overall, this is a great write. I'm glad to have read it.
P.S. The destructive parts of the poem remind me of this section from Shakespeare's Henry IV Part I
"Diseased nature oftentimes breaks forth
In strange eruptions; oft the teeming earth
Is with a kind of colic pinch'd and vex'd
By the imprisoning of unruly wind
Within her womb; which, for enlargement striving,
Shakes the old beldam earth and topples down
Steeples and moss-grown towers."