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    dots Submission Name: what happened in that cavedots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotswhat happened in that cavedots
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    the highway moves
    towards greenish futures
    where the words
    are mixed
    with the honeyed spit
    of always.
    & i've seen
    all the philosophies
    of time
    drag you down
    in your sleep
    while you're sleeping.

    if i stood above you
    & arranged
    each misplaced hair
    to form a pattern
    of contentedness,
    would you notice
    that even the moons
    of my eyes
    adore the way
    you waver
    when you're lost
    in your own memory?

    i'll drape my heart
    over the couch
    when i walk in
    & slip smiles
    into the corners
    of the room
    while you watch me.
    i don't move
    like all the others do.
    i hide romance
    in glances
    & the subtle dances
    of my playful eyes.

    & what is it
    that you are
    that inspires me
    to wonder?
    is it each thought
    that moves
    across me
    that leaves
    me puzzled?
    or is it that i remember,
    because i can,
    what happened
    in that cave
    so long ago?




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