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    dots Submission Name: the space of a kissdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 201
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsthe space of a kissdots
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    the afternoon
    glows on
    into glistering splendor
    & your own.
    & i watch
    as the overcast
    dedication remembers
    perfect folding
    into skin.

    all the clever laurels
    i've been dawning
    on your neck
    become the seconds
    like unkempt apples
    browning
    & upwards
    towards the sun.
    they're all
    just little ways
    to show i'm caring
    cause i can.

    if we could parade
    our costumes of flesh
    through the corridors
    of forever
    i wonder if time,
    like the sweetness
    of becoming,
    would let us pass.
    as of now,
    the witchcraft
    of unrelenting hours
    still leaves us haunted
    by our pasts.

    amongst the water
    of my body
    come the icequakes,
    these tiny vibrations
    between the fingertips
    that rock
    the shorelines
    of my flesh.
    until yours touches mine,
    your body reminds me
    of everything...

    i touch my olive hands
    to the endless road
    before me.
    & i can feel
    the ambient heat
    that guides me
    into the ghost
    of a future
    where you wait.
    if i close my eyes & melt,
    your voice
    is formed
    in the space of kiss
    & i can almost hear you singing,
    like a siren
    loosing air...




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      wow...really like this....great job
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    | Posted on 2008-08-12 00:00:00 | by never_far_away | [ Reply to This ]


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