wow i really like this. It's really good and the message is ...well not exactly "sweet" but hopefully you get where i am comming from. I just...I like it. your metaphores are good, you're structure, your flow. The poem convey's it's message artisticly but doesn't use big metaphors in a way that can easily confuse the reader and leave them struggling to find your meaning. The poem reads well and it's message is clear.
I really like what this poem says. Are you going to give it to the friend to which the poem is to? Honestly i wish a friend of mine would write a poem like this to me. I'd appreciate it so very much.