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    dots Submission Name: Conversationdots

    Author: freshcookies
    Elite Ratio:    4.15 - 63/77/45
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
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    You and I, sitting alone
    under a crescent moon,
    innocent and not
    disturbing anything,
    were ambushed by a
    kindly-looking kidnapper.

    It must have
    dropped out of the trees,
    or maybe, come up
    from the grass
    and crawled up your pant leg
    or mine.

    It tied our wrists together,
    to each other
    with the threads of
    worried thoughts,
    and understanding wove itself
    around us like a cage.

    We were enslaved
    before we saw the threat,
    and even in our
    helplessness, we goaded
    our captor
    to tie us tighter.

    And as it did,
    it laughed and sighed
    and brooded.
    It grinned, frowned
    and furrowed
    its friendly brow,

    Then without warning
    drifted off to sleep.
    And being finally free
    we said goodbye
    leaving our
    conversation behind.

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