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    dots Submission Name: Conversation - Sonnetdots
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    Author: freshcookies
    Elite Ratio:    4.15 - 63/77/45
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
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    dotsConversation - Sonnetdots
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    It came upon us sometime in the night:
    A friendly-visaged conqueror, and sly.
    Held fast in gentle grip ere we could fight
    We didnít see the mischief in its eye.

    Of worried thoughts it formed the threads to bind
    And fastened us together with a grin.
    The vines of understanding intertwined
    And wrought a cage it locked us both within

    But as we were ensnared, our captorís face
    Grinned and grimaced, glowered, glowed, and creased
    Until it lost all interest in our case.
    At last its stubborn supervision ceased.

    And seeing our escape, away we crept
    And said goodbye as conversation slept.




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