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    dots Submission Name: Catch Me If You Candots
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    Author: freshcookies
    Elite Ratio:    4.15 - 63/77/45
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsCatch Me If You Candots
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    She ran laughing toward the water’s edge,
    Calling behind her “catch me if you can”
    And soon felt his arms close around her waist
    As she splashed into the ocean.
    And as they crashed down together
    Laughing
    Into the salty breakers
    She knew she’d fallen in love,
    Begging him, “catch me if you can”.

    And over time he knew as well
    He wanted her forever,
    And kneeling on that very same sand,
    His heart was anxious,
    And hers, jubilant,
    But still,
    Or again,
    She ran away,
    Crushing him like the shells under her feet
    And leaving him,
    Abandoned,
    Beside the roaring ocean.

    As he watched her flee,
    She looked back,
    And her eyes would have told him
    “Catch me if you can”,
    But he couldn’t see them
    Through his tears.




    Submitted on 2008-08-12 02:50:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      As he watched her flee,
    She looked back,
    And her eyes would have told him
    “Catch me if you can”,
    But he couldn’t see them
    Through his tears.



    This does convey a bit more of the story than the villanelle form it was paired with, but it also possesses a much greater tone of finality than the other post. There is a sense here that the gulf of understanding between the two is so vast that the possibility that he may comprehend what to do next is very slight. I wonder if the concept of "opposites attracting, but not completely" is at the heart of this write? Regardless of whether that may be the case or not, I find this an intriguing companion to its fraternal twin.

    Bill
    | Posted on 2008-08-12 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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