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    dots Submission Name: Catch Me If You Can - Villanelledots
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    Author: freshcookies
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    dotsCatch Me If You Can - Villanelledots
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    She didn’t tell him why she ran,
    Along the beach and toward the sea,
    And told him “catch me if you can”.

    And as he chased her ‘cross the sand
    Her heart beat fast in jubilee.
    She didn’t tell him why she ran.

    He seemed to her the perfect man.
    She fell in love with him, you see,
    And told him “catch me if you can”.

    To marry her had been his plan
    But when he got down on one knee
    She didn’t tell him why she ran.

    So like the day it all began
    She fled from him with anxious glee
    And told him “catch me if you can”.

    He sadly did not understand
    The reason why she thus did flee.
    She didn’t tell him why she ran,
    And told him “catch me if you can”.




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      Another young lady wishing to be caught be a man who doesn't realize he should pursue his dream. I suppose some will never comprehend that apparent rejection may actually be the beginning of courtship. At least that's what I gathered from this write. A very nice use of classic form as well.

    Bill
    | Posted on 2008-08-12 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      This is good....though it leaves the reader in an anxious jam to know why she DID run. (why did she?) It doesn't sound forced and the rhyme is good, which is not seen often together. Thanks for the read!
    dancer
    | Posted on 2008-08-12 00:00:00 | by dancer-of-words | [ Reply to This ]


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