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    dots Submission Name: unknowndots
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    Author: concrete_rose
    ASL Info:    31/f/nc
    Elite Ratio:    2.59 - 43/51/34
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       yeah i know this doesnt rhyme and what not but its just a quick one just spilled out words onto paper, maybe worth a read maybe not, would like some comments!


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    dotsunknowndots
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    tantilizing dreams awaken this,
    binding extremes bordering imprisonment,
    whose to break the chains of loneliness,
    salvage the spirit indefinate,
    impending loss of tranquility,
    the clouds fizzle away darkening,
    skies once blue and freedom rests,
    upon the age of innocence.
    But awaiting employment of character,
    where the once lively one has shattered;
    its own peace and now lies bewildered,
    upon the scattered roses,
    oh for the one there that has its own imposes,
    lost to this one indeed, raptured.
    Away now cursed bad and evil dreams,
    awaken to this the bliss of time,
    for the things that are wanted,
    equal pebbles by the river,
    and the hands are washed clean there.




    Submitted on 2008-08-12 04:58:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i love the way the poem ends so gental ... the washing of the skin - like staring over ,anew
    the piece was alittle dull and gloomy but i think it stands alone really good ....well done

    bloodstone
    | Posted on 2009-08-13 00:00:00 | by Bloodstone | [ Reply to This ]


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