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    dots Submission Name: restlessdots

    Author: Beulah
    Elite Ratio:    4.78 - 588/414/44
    Words: 21
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       treading on unfamiliar ground

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    gazing into
    cautious abandon
    winging hallowed
    harmonies to shore
    you make
    these moments

    furiously tamed

    and gone

    Submitted on 2008-08-12 12:48:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hi there liefkind. This first part of my poem may addresse the situation and bring some light:

    A Puzzle – a Foreigner `I am`

    As I stand before the Mirror
    A Puzzle from a Puzzle with a Puzzle

    `I am` that Puzzle.
    Adam Eve was is and will never be…..
    Outside the Portal to Infinity
    A Foreign gripping sight folded in

    People aren’t where they belong.
    A Stranger Place A Stranger Situation.
    They are Darkness and They are Light.
    Each a Foreigner
    Foreign characters Foreign Thought spells
    Foreign Longing Foreign Lusts
    A Mysterious Creation are We.
    Adam and Eve `I am` and They.

    Hope you cope. Luv dad.
    | Posted on 2008-08-26 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]
      Well constructed and cryptic poem.
    The best I can do is this: Peggy Paris comment is revelant and did say something to me to guide me in this:
    Looking in the mirror to see tomorrow With a maybe speculated caution ness with sacred thoughts sweeping a terrain familiar with what you harmonize well with and also what you may achieve and expect to share again when a decision is eminent and crossed to make the most of where you will be to share it with a satisfied harmonizing stilled mind. I like the poem. Regards. Dad. Joachim.
    | Posted on 2008-08-24 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]
      We'd certainly miss out on lots of life's adventures if we gave up our willingness to take chances. You said lots with few words. This one warrants rereading! :-) Sharon
    | Posted on 2008-08-20 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]

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