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    dots Submission Name: Sorceriesdots
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    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 1042/1119/535
    Words: 249
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
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    At dusk a line of weaving priestesses
    March from the fen to woo the living there,
    So full of spice their fragrant long, long hair,
    Drown you in their tart and warming kisses,
    To lift you from all pain and deep despair.

    I watch them strut about the ruined square
    Their gowns are rustled with the haunted breeze,
    They sit and lie at rest below tall trees
    And comb with silver combs their lovely hair,
    Their eyes so full of love and sorceries.

    And then is heard nine lutes of subtle tune
    That fill that grotto and the nearby fen,
    With songs of love and longing for lost men
    Below a pale and most stupendous moon,
    That rune they chant again and then again.

    Now from my place of solitude I stare
    And marvel at the blush on each pale cheek,
    Such women might an eager king here seek,
    Such females seemed an answer to a prayer,
    Each carried beauty and a wild mystique.

    I marked one girl who stood upon a stone,
    Who lifted up her arms as if in prayer,
    Her loveliness exceptional, so rare,
    She should have been a queen upon a throne,
    It seemed she breathed some sweet enchanted air.

    But then the clouds the giant moon obscured,
    The magic rolled away like some cold tide,
    The priestesses were gone and now beside
    Me in that most oppressive night there soared
    Wan comets in the distance as I cried.




    Submitted on 2008-08-12 13:24:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this write is breathtaking. The ryhme flowed throughout and everything fit together. Great Job!
    | Posted on 2008-08-13 00:00:00 | by silentpoison | [ Reply to This ]
      Aaah, no sooner do you have them nearly within your grasp, than do they fade away, leaving only a fragrant mystery and fantacied memory behind! Ain't that the way with all lovely females, sorceresses included!

    Sorry I haven't been by as much; I've been covered with business since returning from holiday!

    Another most excellent, outstanding write my talented friend!!!
    | Posted on 2008-08-12 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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