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    dots Submission Name: Just Lookdots
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    Author: vampirefreak69
    Elite Ratio:    2.14 - 30/103/87
    Words: 166
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsJust Lookdots
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    Look at me,
    look at me up close.
    Look at the tears in my eyes,
    the words choking in my throat,
    the logic fighting the desire.
    Look at me, losing strength
    as I fight myself and you,
    for myself, and for you.

    So look at me.

    I'm lost,
    circling myself
    in the middle of nowhere,
    tired of fading away.
    Fading away, you call it.
    Maybe I'm fading away.

    So why look at me?

    Why watch me ebb?
    I'm tired now,
    far too tired
    to reach out and grab you.


    Pull me closer, closer, closer

    (before there's nothing left to pull.)




    Submitted on 2008-08-13 08:01:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      the logic fighting the desire ..... I like it !!
    | Posted on 2008-08-13 00:00:00 | by Dying Young | [ Reply to This ]


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