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    dots Submission Name: Puppet or Puppet Masterdots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
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    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I wrote this watching Being John Malkovitch last night. I really need to stop watching the gonzo movies. I've really not lost it.


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    He controls me like a dextrous puppeteer,
    Or he thinks so.
    I pretend to obey
    waiting for the time
    I make a show of defiance.
    My plans growing more complex
    with every pull of my strings.
    Perhaps I'll wrap them
    around his neck
    or have him hit himself senseless
    with his own hand
    shattering his illusion of power,
    for he thinks of me like a limb,
    but I'm a separate tree,
    a bonsai
    reclaiming the right to grow.




    Submitted on 2004-07-06 03:26:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      possessed puppet! i love it! whack him a good one, that puppet master... this was funny, although it's got that sinister edge to it. i like the reference to a bonzai tree. makes me think of "the karate kid," which i actually really like.
    | Posted on 2004-07-07 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      All I have to say about this peice is: ::Evil maniacal laughter::


    and of course, lovely write, m'lady! ::tips hat and skips away:: ~Sicobe R. Crow
    | Posted on 2004-07-07 00:00:00 | by Crow | [ Reply to This ]
      I always love to hear of the deserving getting their comeupance. Beware the meek as they may be hiding something. Inner strength waiting to roar out when the puppet finally reaches it's limit. So , many people have already said the things I wish I would have said first about the strings and bonzai. Love it!

    Glad you had a safe trip. ("Be careful among them English"...from the movie Witness.)
    | Posted on 2004-07-06 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]
      very nice...the person being controlled turning the tables...i like this...and you getting all this from a movie you watched...that mind of yours must never stop..lol...i like the part about the tree at the end ..sort of comes off like the person at the beginning thinking that the other person is their property hence the branch but then they find out as the other person is in control now that noone can be another peoples property...wonderful imaginative write cuddle...smiles ange.
    | Posted on 2004-07-06 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]
      I really, really, really like this. As much as Bonsai is an art, part of me thinks it's slightly creepy - all those wires restricting the growth of trees. I really liked
    "Perhaps I'll wrap them
    Around his neck
    Or have him hit himself senseless
    With my own hand"
    Great write!
    | Posted on 2004-07-06 00:00:00 | by Judy | [ Reply to This ]
      Not a bad attempt to picture an abusive relationship especiallt with the black eyes and sad face in your photo!
    My heart goes out to you if it is a real set of black eyes.
    YOU deserve better, especially for such a great poetess and such a great write.
    Sorry to not around much lately, I've been a bit pre-occupied with chores of another passion- my garden.
    | Posted on 2004-07-06 00:00:00 | by Clayton | [ Reply to This ]
      This is wonderful truly it is, I can so relate. I got stuck here though...
    "Perhaps I'll wrap them
    Around his neck.."
    ending the line with them caused me to get stuck, although I have no suggestions for this problem of mine. So I guess it will just remain my issue. :)
    Well done and you are not going crazy, Ienjoyed this poem very much, well written and original with your choice of bonzai tree. :)
    | Posted on 2004-07-06 00:00:00 | by Belle De Jour | [ Reply to This ]
      Nothing strange about this. Most women have mastered the art of sending sublime signal back up the line to the male puppeteer counterpart. So, the picture is of the man in control, but is he? Once again, the turntable spins around and we ask, if the man is aware of this, who is now controlling who? The lines become entangled and the only way is to stop controlling others altogether. Manipulation is a sport with many bases, and they cannot be covered all at once.
    | Posted on 2004-07-06 00:00:00 | by Lelik | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like the bonsai comparison and the part about wrapping your strings around his neck (I have a very black humour). a great piece, Amy. I enjoyed reading it.
    | Posted on 2004-07-06 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the concept. I think women are artists like this, I'll bet half of the stuff I've ever "thought up" was a plan my wife hatched in some way that I believed it was my own idea! Yup, you just let him keep pulling the strings.
    Bonsai!
    Dave
    | Posted on 2004-07-06 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]
      Bonsai--tiny, but tough --and ever more so able to outlive much larger siblings. You are not just another dumb stick now are you---I love the way this shows the brooding triumph of the quintessential
    spineless pawn---over the master and manipulator. The allusion to he--hoisting himself on his own petard--be that the strangle of strings or the blow from solid elm wood--deliciously smacks of retributive justice--my favorite kind,
    Awesome write Amy, Silver
    | Posted on 2004-07-11 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      this is so wow... so many ppl think that they can control other ppl and ppl just let them... i always think though that the whole idea of biding ones time until they can show the 'puppeteer' that they arent their pupet but rather their own person is good but i also think they gotta be careful coz (well my luck anyways...) the day they had decided to snap free and show them where its at they would prolly realise that infact they were under control of the puppeteer... and i dont think this comment made any sense at all so good luck with that! sorry already but i know what im on about if thats any consolation LOL
    | Posted on 2004-07-16 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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