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    dots Submission Name: Third Eye Blindeddots

    Author: withblindedeyez
    ASL Info:    19/m/nc
    Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 83/121/58
    Words: 344
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 595
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    dotsThird Eye Blindeddots

    Dark hollow crimson heart
    Cut, flake, scab, heal, scar again
    As blood runs cold, hostile eyes close
    Forever is not a word that breaths
    Creation of truth, behold the beautiful
    Tragedy witness the unseen, from
    The deepest darkest places the words
    Spill out like a bleeding heart, connecting
    Thoughts to feelings, bridging these memories
    Together as we walk down the road to
    The gallows of heartache, only to rise
    With the wings of love to rise and fly
    Above and shine down radiant colors
    To flood the halls of blinded minds to
    Pour light into the horrid chambers
    Locked behind hollow eyes, opening
    Door of and to the unknown walking
    Backwards in the darkness of a world alone
    Casting the first stone, broken bones
    Third eye blinded, feelings extracted their
    Distraught, despair, living this life is hell
    Compromise, combine, a labyrinth of dying eyes
    Growing adolescents, in bloom to victimize
    Hidden infidelities, is what's life is promised to be
    But no one sees what I see, cause theses
    Little imperfections are what make up me
    Through your eyes you don't see me
    You see the tattoos, scars, and earrings
    Automatically I am not able to stand beside
    You in society, I'm dirt cursed to these lower
    Hollows of hell, like my name came with no
    Story to tell, no message, no feeling encrypted with in
    Like a body rusted and old with no soul
    But as life begins to flow, my eyes open wide
    Its not me its you, you can't see past your blinded
    Eyes, cause beneath the dirt, beneath the skin
    My proof of life is encrypted within wrapped
    Around my many sins, I am forgiven cause
    Salvation starts within, Its not me its you
    Cause you can't seem to see through your
    Blinded eyes to see me equally, you hate me
    For everything,, because you want to be me.
    To understand and know walk life's' plan
    To start life, the first step lies under the skin
    It lies within….

    Submitted on 2008-08-13 23:45:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hm... What can I say? Try harder next time. Not to write a poem but actually express what you want with your own words. Then and only then, after you have accomplished that try to develop a style of your own...
    | Posted on 2008-08-14 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]

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