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    dots Submission Name: Amongest The Sailsdots

    Author: withblindedeyez
    ASL Info:    19/m/nc
    Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 83/121/58
    Words: 211
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsAmongest The Sailsdots

    Amongst the sails, the wind blows carrying them closer to her, they've come to take back the one I stole, love will blind the eyes of the man in its hold, so many men will die for one mans greed, these walls will not hold, he has come, bringing death to all those who oppose, it ends tonight, these walls will not hold….

    Smoke fills the hollow night, fight for your lives; Spartans have invaded within the walls of troy, save her, I must protect her with this sword, even if the cost in my life, I will not die before her, love will prevail though the dark, Fight for your lives, Spartans have invaded within the walls of troy

    Escaping out the back we are left standing by the hillside, watching the clouds paint the sky into a dark-hearted silhouette lullaby, sung down from the gods above, as the fire burns our dreams alive.

    Tears falls from these eyes's standing by the hillside, breathless had our empire burns with the night (as our empire falls), just for one man's greed, no one was spared or freed

    Regret fills this heart, it all began because of me, thousands of men have died, for one mans greed…

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