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    dots Submission Name: Could this be real?dots

    Author: b_v_grant
    ASL Info:    23/M/Jamaica
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 125/118/69
    Words: 230
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 461
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    dotsCould this be real?dots

    Verse 1

    I've been searching for a lifetime,
    Even through the pain.
    You see I really stopped trusting people,
    And just after that you came.
    Its amazing how we took off,
    It's like we were meant to be.
    Baby I don't wanna waste another moment,
    Thinking of what I used to be.

    But I...,
    Know that I need you.

    And I...,
    Feel it every minute.

    And you...,
    Should take some time to tell me how you feel


    Could this be real...,
    Every little thing fits in with me,
    I just cant believe its,
    My fragile heart breaks so easily,
    I'm trying to ask myself if.
    Could this be real.

    Verse 2

    It feels like I have been waiting,
    For a second chance at love.
    It feels like I am going crazy,
    Then you came from above.

    Now I...,
    Know that I need you.

    And I...,
    Feel it every minute.

    And you...,
    Should know by now I'm what you need.



    Could this be real....


    Just one,
    More flash of your face

    Could this be real....

    Chorus X 2

    I try to tell myself that this is real

    I've been searching for a lifetime,
    Even through the pain.

    Submitted on 2008-08-14 05:51:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This was a nice piece it had it's great moments and it's ok moments. I would strengthen the 2nd verse add more lines more dimensions. But overall it was good. I wonder who's causing this cascade of emotions, Brian talk di tings dem! lol.

    | Posted on 2008-08-17 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]

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