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    dots Submission Name: Wake Me When the Wart Is Overdots

    Author: rws
    ASL Info:    57/m/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 2777/1297/258
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Satire
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    Wake Me When the Wart Is Over by Jennie Thalia

    Although I could not write free verse
    Free verse wrote to me
    The carriage held three of a kind
    And I, banality

    Then death arose to offer snacks
    Pudding cups and brie
    Miss Dickinson thought it a ruse
    And fondly cut the cheese

    Perhaps, kind sir, the air is chilled
    By this unholy scum
    Now drop your pantaloons and cough
    And I shall warm thy buns

    Good madam, please, youve been so kind
    Now plowing I must go
    In fertile valleys full of elves
    Where have I put my ho?

    O, grab my arse and ride away
    These steeds may give a snort
    Unless of course the steel is bent
    Or else the blade is short

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      Ahaha, I love parody. And I loath Dickinson, so this poem hits a special place in my heart.

    Your syllable counts drop on a couple lines. 'Free verse wrote to me' is one syllable short, as is 'Pudding cups and brie', but beyond that everything seems mostly solid (a couple of iffy places as far as iambs go, but nothing big enough to mention).

    ...or is it not your poem at all? I have only now noticed the author attribution. If so, still--thanks for sharing

    | Posted on 2008-08-15 00:00:00 | by saartha | [ Reply to This ]
      Jennie Thalia really knew how to hit below
    the belt. The poem is saying: now that I have gotten what i want, you can ride off into the sunset.
    | Posted on 2008-08-15 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]
      This leaves me thinking..."what just happened?"

    But...in a good way...I think.
    It's just rather baffling. I think I like it though. It made me smile anyway. I don't know what it said, really...but I feel this is one of those that isn't really supposed to say anything meaningful.
    | Posted on 2008-08-14 00:00:00 | by freshcookies | [ Reply to This ]

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