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    dots Submission Name: Scar Under My Skindots
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    Author: withblindedeyez
    ASL Info:    19/m/nc
    Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 83/121/58
    Words: 205
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsScar Under My Skindots
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    Pens become razors
    Slicing flesh one word at a time
    Spilling blood onto this stain paper
    Encrypting this emotions into metaphors
    Sealing my fate with a kiss
    A kiss of strife,
    Twas the night, I laid with a knife.
    My world came burning down
    But as the smoke cleared I saw yo
    Standing there, shining bright
    A morbid, horrid affection
    Be still my crimson beating heart
    Another day I will loom
    Like a shadow cast upon your heart
    Rising you from your nightmares
    With these hands, on these knees
    I pray for your hands in mine
    To take you and dance under fire lit skies
    Moving to the beat of the night
    Wind blows, pulling us tight together
    Passion is growing bubbling up inside
    Till it explodes, releasing cries of ecstasy
    Vision is seduced by radiant colors
    So bright I close my eyes.
    My eyes open, to find you a dream
    A myth, a lie, a creation of decaying inside
    To the taste you left on my lips
    To the scent you left on my pillow
    The four-letter lie, you fed to me
    You left your stain on my heart
    Wrap it in flesh and bone
    And youve became a scar under my skin




    Submitted on 2008-08-14 21:16:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      absolutely heartbreaking, I thoroughly enjoyed it.
    | Posted on 2008-08-16 00:00:00 | by overthinker | [ Reply to This ]


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