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    dots Submission Name: Life's Dealt Me A Handdots
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    Author: poet09
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 157/162/122
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsLife's Dealt Me A Handdots
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    Confused, and feeling all alone

    maybe I should be on my own.

    Even though its been years

    I don't want to see any tears.


    Her hearts so hard, yet its meek

    I have the love she shouldn't seek.

    She doesn't know the other half

    and this wouldn't make her laugh.


    Thinking back on special times,

    I've truly reached the end of the line.

    There is no hope for lonely me,

    life has changed my destiny.


    It dealt me a hand I can't play,

    the pain I feel is here to stay.

    My eyes now opened showing sorrow

    for a person like me there's no tomorrow.


    My world is being torn apart

    now I'm left with an empty heart.

    With no feeling and nothing to say

    I'll be led to go astray.









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