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    dots Submission Name: Liesdots
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    Author: mysterious one
    ASL Info:    24/f/in my head
    Elite Ratio:    3.61 - 58/57/17
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsLiesdots
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    You looked at me through blood shot eyes
    You told me everything would be alright
    I knew it was a lie

    You smiled at me when things were bad
    You were always very sad
    I knew it was a lie

    You told me you knew right from wrong
    Then you laughed and smoked your bong
    I knew it was a lie

    You looked at me between each puff
    You told me I didn't have it rough
    I knew it was a lie

    You spent your days getting high
    You said it was right and expected me to buy
    I knew it was a lie

    You told me I was nothing and I had no choice
    You told me you wanted to hear my voice
    I knew it was a lie

    You said you loved me, it was only fair
    I told you that I really cared
    But that too was a lie




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