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    dots Submission Name: Soltice Eclipseddots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 23/161/138
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Solstice Eclipsed

    It's very bright outside
    Much too bright for me
    I think I'll sleep in today
    The stars are my key

    I know while I'm sleeping
    She will be up and about
    We both will in my dreams, though
    I awake, she takes my route

    It's not always hit and miss
    Sometimes we compromise
    But "I don't miss her" and "dreams are enough"
    Are both big ugly lies

    I've changed my mind for today
    I won't sleep in quite as much
    I'll endure the sun's unwanted rays
    But it'll be easy with her touch

    I know I perceive it rather harsh but
    It's not as bad as I make it to be
    Don't need or desire any other sunlight
    She's enough "Sunshine" for me
    And of course to make things right
    I will in turn be her "Moonlight"




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    ||| Comments |||
      Very Beautifully said and written
    I really liked how you showed just how much your Soulmate means to you
    I hope you show this to her to show her exactly how important her love is to you
    The rhyme scheme was good as well this does not sound forced anywhere
    Great Job!!!
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2008-08-17 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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