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    dots Submission Name: Welcome Back My Long LostFrienddots
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    Author: WhY-dO-yOu-CrY
    ASL Info:    17/F/ConnUSA
    Elite Ratio:    5.51 - 131/79/78
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 41
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 644



    Description:
       very weirdly written, but it was also written at 2 in the morning so it's sloopy, and i kow that. and i mite be confusing but oh well. I mite delete, mite edit who knows


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    dotsWelcome Back My Long LostFrienddots
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    I can feel the energy leaving my body.
    I can feel the numbness coming back.
    But why,
    Why does it choose to suddenly make an appreance?
    After all these months.

    I am tired.
    But I can not sleep.
    I want to,
    Oh how I want to.
    But my body and mind won't allow me the peaceful slumber I oh so need.

    My body aches for my blades,
    My mind aches for more pain,
    But my heart can't take it anymore,
    And the mind knows that.
    It pushes the hearts limit,

    So eventually all three will die,
    And in the end so will I.




    Submitted on 2008-08-16 16:03:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Yes my Friend eventually we all will die but Please I beg you dont rush it
    Life is so beautiful and you are still very young
    Please trust me on this it gets much easier as time goes on
    If you ever seriously feel like cutting as you said in your write Please feel free to email me
    I will be there as A Friend that I Promise you
    Great Job!!!
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2008-08-17 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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